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Help! We’ve forgotten how to write amazing sentences…

Choose one of the sentences from our Katie Morag book to ‘uplevel’ below:

1. katie Morag’s grandma came to stay
2. grandma Mainland lived in the city
3. she arrived on the boat

Can you improve one of these sentences by adding extra information, capital letters, full stops, adjectives or time connectives?
If you want an extra challenge, improve all the sentences and link them together with time connectives to create a paragraph…
I’m looking forward to reading your super sentences!

83 Comments

  1. Evie.j

    December 15, 2013 @ 9:20 am          Reply

    Wow daisy those are fab and well done on getting star of the week!

  2. Lily

    November 18, 2013 @ 6:02 pm          Reply

    Katie morag lives in a post office.Her baby brother was called Laim. She’s got2 granny’s.she has frizzy red hair.

  3. Rosa

    November 3, 2013 @ 4:13 pm          Reply

    One boiling hot sunny day Katie Morags grandma came to stay at the Isle of Stuay .Katie was extremely excited about the visit because Grandma Mainland lived in the big, busy,noisy city far away from her. In the sunshine Grandma mainland arrived on the big ,shiny ,long boat.

  4. May

    October 28, 2013 @ 7:29 pm          Reply

    One beautiful sunny day Katie Morag went to deliver the post. Suddenly she got bored and went under the red burn bridge and slips.

  5. Sam P

    October 28, 2013 @ 8:36 am          Reply

    Katie Morag was looking out of her window and she saw her Grandma coming. Her Grandma was coming to stay. She opened the door and I said “Will you play with me?”. She said “Yes I will in a minute”. Katie Morag was very happy.

  6. Maddy

    October 27, 2013 @ 8:43 pm          Reply

    Grandma Mainland lived in a big, loud city but she wanted to visit Katie Morag so she arrived in a big, shiny, red boat. Katie Morag’s pretty Grandma came to stay at her lovely house.

  7. Maddy

    October 27, 2013 @ 8:33 pm          Reply

    I had a great holiday in spain. I went swimming every day. I had my birthday in spain. Now I’m 7!

  8. Maisie

    October 27, 2013 @ 7:12 pm          Reply

    In the Summer holidays little Katie Morag ‘s wonderful Grandma Mainland was coming for a fun visit. Before she went to meet her Grandma from the big grey boat she put on her sparkly red dress and bright wellies. Then the excited Katie went to go and pick up her old Grandma who lived in the big city.

  9. Alex S

    October 27, 2013 @ 7:06 pm          Reply

    Katie Morag’s beautiful and old Grandma came to stay.
    Grandma Mainland lives in the big city where there are tall buildings called skyscrapers. She arrived on a wooden boat with big white sails.

  10. Josh

    October 27, 2013 @ 5:48 pm          Reply

    One sunny hot morning, Katie Morag’s Grandma came to stay. She was extremely tired when she arrived, because Grandma Mainland lived in a busy city. It was a long way for an old lady to travel.
    Katie Morag had been waiting impatiently all week. Finally, the day had arrived. She waved as she saw her Grandma approach the harbour in a little red and white boat.

  11. Thomas N

    October 27, 2013 @ 3:35 pm          Reply

    On a rainy, stormy day, Katie Morag’s soaking wet, soggy, grandma came to stay for three months and a day. Grandma Mainland lived in a tall block of flats in the huge city.

  12. Zac H

    October 27, 2013 @ 1:45 pm          Reply

    Katie Morag’s lovely Grandma Mainland came to stay at Katie’s little home in the shop and Post Office. Grandma Mainland always brought her a very special present because she loved her so much.

  13. Esme

    October 27, 2013 @ 11:04 am          Reply

    Grandma Mainland was coming to stay and Katie Morag was so excited! She didn’t get to see her much because she lived in the city. Katie rushed down to meet the black and white boat with a big bunch of beautiful red flowers!

  14. Guy

    October 27, 2013 @ 11:00 am          Reply

    Grandma Mainland lived in the very noisy and dusty city and she was very popular in that city! Lots of people liked her and loved her because she was beautiful and kind, but she was a real show off!

  15. Lucy

    October 27, 2013 @ 9:39 am          Reply

    On a very hot summers day, Katie Morag’s Grandma came to stay. Grandma Mainland lived in the big city and she was very posh. Eventually she arrived on the red and white boat and she had lots of necklaces and bracelets on.

  16. Savannah

    October 27, 2013 @ 8:44 am          Reply

    Katie Morag’s grandma Mainland, came to stay at Katie’s holiday house by the sea.
    Grandma Mainland lives in a big, noisy City far away. Katie’s grandma Mainland arrived on a big sparkly white boat.

  17. Charlie S

    October 26, 2013 @ 6:21 pm          Reply

    In the morning Katie Morag’s scruffy Grandma came to stay for the night, because she wanted to enter the sheep show.

    • Mrs Armstrong

      October 26, 2013 @ 10:39 pm          Reply

      Super desciption Charlie and you’ve used a very technical connective too :-).
      Can you link the sentences now using time connectives to make a short paragraph?

    • Mrs Knight

      October 28, 2013 @ 4:54 pm          Reply

      Well done. I like the way you used ‘because’ to link your two phrases together.

  18. Charlie W

    October 26, 2013 @ 5:33 pm          Reply

    Katie Morag was extremely excited because her wonderful Grandma Mainland was coming to stay for a whole week! Grandma Mainland lives in a very busy and noisy city so she was happy to sail on a big red boat to the quiet Isle of Struay to stay with Katie.

    • Mrs Armstrong

      October 26, 2013 @ 10:41 pm          Reply

      Great adjectives Charlie and super punctuation! Can you include some time connectives too?

    • Mrs Knight

      October 28, 2013 @ 4:58 pm          Reply

      I love your description. You have used some really great adjectives to add detail to your writing. I am pleased to see you linking phrases together with words like ‘so’ and ‘because’. Super work!

  19. Abby

    October 26, 2013 @ 4:30 pm          Reply

    One sunny morning Katie Morag’s grandma Mainland was coming to stay for 3 days. Katie Morag’s grandma Mainland lives in the big, busy, dirty city. Posh, pretty grandma Mainland was arriving on the island on the small red and white boat at lunchtime. Katie Morag was very excited as she doesn’t see her that much.

  20. Dan

    October 26, 2013 @ 4:03 pm          Reply

    Katie Morag’s was so excited that her grandma was coming to stay, at last she arrived on a big black boat after a terrible sea journey.
    Grandma Mainland lived in the city and never got to see Katie, because she lived in the country.

    • Mrs. Armstrong

      October 26, 2013 @ 10:42 pm          Reply

      Great work Dan! You have used some super adjectives – well done!
      Can you include time connectives too?

  21. Emily F

    October 26, 2013 @ 3:58 pm          Reply

    One sunny Saturday morning Katie Morag’s Grandma came to stay because she wanted some peace and quiet. Grandma Mainland lives in the big city and is very posh. She has a beautiful pink dress and other fancy stuff. She arrived on a large white ferry that had slowly crossed the calm blue water.

  22. Megan

    October 25, 2013 @ 4:52 pm          Reply

    Katie Morag was very excited because Grandma Mainland came to stay. She bought all her makeup posh clothes and shoes in a nice big suitcase. It was red and orange striped because they were her favourite colours. Posh Grandma Mainland was going to share her room so Katie Morag tidied her room up especially for her. They were going to play lots of games and Katie Morag was very excited because she was playing her favourite fairy game.

    • Mrs. Armstrong

      October 26, 2013 @ 10:44 pm          Reply

      Super work Megan – you have used some great adjectives and excellent connectives! Don’t forget commas when you list more than one item in a sentence :-).

    • Mrs Knight

      October 28, 2013 @ 5:00 pm          Reply

      A super piece of writing Megan. I like the adjectives you have used to add detail. Can you add a comma to your list of suitcase items?

  23. jeren

    October 25, 2013 @ 2:25 pm          Reply

    Last summer, Katie Morag’s old but charming grandma Mainland who lived in the big city, came to visit them by a white and shiny boat.

    • Mrs Armstrong

      October 26, 2013 @ 10:45 pm          Reply

      A super sentence Jeren – you have added some great description!
      Can you link more sentences using time connectives to make a mini paragraph now?

    • Mrs Knight

      October 28, 2013 @ 5:01 pm          Reply

      Well done Jeren. You have used some lovely adjectives and commas too!

  24. Jamie

    October 25, 2013 @ 2:21 pm          Reply

    During the Easter holidays Grandma Mainland came to stay with Katie Morag, who was very excited because she loved having visitors. Grandma Mainland arrived on a very shiny, green ferry, carrying a large suitcase which was very pink and full of posh city clothes, including her lipstick. She lived in a smart flat in a busy city but was looking forward to some quiet time on the island.

    • Mrs Armstrong

      October 26, 2013 @ 10:46 pm          Reply

      Super work Jamie! You have included some brilliant adjectives with fab punctuation too :-). Keep it up!

  25. Isobel H

    October 25, 2013 @ 2:07 pm          Reply

    Katie Morag is exited about Grandma coming to stay.
    Katie Morag’s Grandma Mainland lives in a wonderful city. When Grandma arrived on the boat she was thrilled to see Katie.

    • Mrs Armstrong

      October 26, 2013 @ 10:49 pm          Reply

      Great work Isobel! You have added to the sentences very effectively 🙂
      Can you add further detail now by using a connective (and, but, so) to extend your sentences?

    • Mrs Knight

      October 28, 2013 @ 5:05 pm          Reply

      Well done Isobel. I like the adjectives you have used to add detail. Next time try and start each sentence differently instead of using ‘Katie Morag’ so often.

  26. William

    October 25, 2013 @ 1:45 pm          Reply

    One sunny day Grandma Mainland came to stay at Katie Morags house. Grandma Mainland lived in the city which was big and loud. She had to get a boat across the choppy sea.

    • Mrs Armstrong

      October 26, 2013 @ 10:50 pm          Reply

      Great work William… You have used some super description in your sentences! Can you add even more time connectives to link your sentences together now?

  27. Mya

    October 25, 2013 @ 9:29 am          Reply

    One sunny morning, Katie Morag

  28. William A

    October 25, 2013 @ 8:20 am          Reply

    Grandma Mainland lived in a city. It is a big and noisy place to live. Lots of events happen there. Most of the events come from Scotland, like tossing the cable and long, distance running. Near to where Grandma Mainland lived there was a enormous shop. People who visited the mainland could buy lots of souvenirs there like badges that said the mainland on them.

  29. Jamie

    October 24, 2013 @ 10:21 am          Reply

    One Monday afternoon Grandma Mainland came to stay with Katie Morag for 5 weeks. She lives in a busy city in Scotland. She wears posh clothes.

    • Mrs Armstrong

      October 24, 2013 @ 4:12 pm          Reply

      A super start Jamie! I love the extra information and description you have added to your sentences :-).
      Could you use a connective to link your shorter sentences too (and, but or so)?

  30. Eve

    October 23, 2013 @ 4:39 pm          Reply

    Grandma Mainland lived in a very busy,loud and noisy city, in an enormous flat.
    The flat was very high. It was the biggest flat on the mainland and had very big windows. Her flat was on the top floor and it was a very
    beautiful view at the top of the flat. She lived next door to one of her friends.

  31. Tom H

    October 23, 2013 @ 9:33 am          Reply

    Last Saturday Katie Morag

  32. Tomas S

    October 22, 2013 @ 3:33 pm          Reply

    One Wednesday morning , Katie Morag’s very old grandma came to stay for a week. Grandma Mainland lived in the big and busy city. She arrived on the big, blue boat at 1.00pm. Katie is looking forward to a fun week with her grandma!

    • Mrs. Armstrong

      October 22, 2013 @ 4:07 pm          Reply

      Great work Tomas! I love your adjectives and exclamation mark 🙂
      Can you include time connectives in between your sentences too?

  33. Hayden

    October 21, 2013 @ 6:48 pm          Reply

    Katie Morag was very excited, her very posh Grandma who was also really nice, was coming to stay at their island home.
    Grandma Mainland lived in a really warm and cosy cottage which was surrounded by a very big and noisy city.
    Katie Morag’s Grandma was arriving on a big boat which was red and black, and moved very slowly over the waves.

  34. Sophie

    October 21, 2013 @ 6:40 pm          Reply

    On Tuesday Katie Morag’s grandma came to stay. Katie’s grandma was very posh. Grandma Mainland lived in an extremely big city. Katie’s grandma arrived on a huge blue and white boat and she had a sleep over for a few days.

  35. millie

    October 21, 2013 @ 6:11 pm          Reply

    Katie Morags grandma came to stay at Katies house, she had lots of beautiful dresses and lots of different colour lipsticks. Katie was very excited and and she could not wait to see her grandma.

    • Mrs. Armstrong

      October 22, 2013 @ 4:09 pm          Reply

      Super sentences Millie 🙂 You have described Grandma Mainland perfectly! Can you think of any time connectives you might be able to use now?

  36. millie

    October 21, 2013 @ 6:06 pm          Reply

    One sunny afternoon Katie morag rushed to see her grandma arrive off the boat, her name was grandma mainland ans she was very posh.

  37. Verity

    October 21, 2013 @ 7:56 am          Reply

    After a long and exhausting journey Katie Morag’s Grandmother came to stay for the school holiday. Her name was Grandma Mainland and she lived in a big, busy city. Grandma Mainland always travelled by boat as she didn’t like flying.

    • Mrs. Armstrong

      October 21, 2013 @ 10:11 am          Reply

      Super sentences Verity! I love the extra information you have included about Grandma mainland’s fear of flying :-).
      Remember only to use your first name on the blog (I have removed your surname for you) as it is an open document.

  38. Sam L

    October 21, 2013 @ 7:50 am          Reply

    On Wednesday, Katie Morag’s posh Grandma came to stay. She arrived on the huge red and blue ferry which brings excited visitors from the mainland once a week.
    Grandma Mainland really enjoys wearing pretty dresses and colourful make up.

  39. Harry J

    October 18, 2013 @ 5:18 pm          Reply

    Katie Morag’s grandmother came to stay with her in her little cottage. She arrived on a big red shiny boat. Her name was Grandma Mainland and she lived in the big city. She was very posh and she was very fancy too. I cant wait to lern more about Katie Morag again!! 🙂

  40. Daisy B

    October 17, 2013 @ 10:55 am          Reply

    Last weekend, Katie Morag’s very posh grandma came to stay. She lived in the big city and to visit Katie, she had to travel by boat. The ferry was red and blue and she had a relaxing journey on the calm sea.

  41. Alex D

    October 16, 2013 @ 6:13 pm          Reply

    Katie Morag’s grandma lived in the city, she came to visit Katie, arriving on a boat.

    • Mrs. Armstrong

      October 17, 2013 @ 4:36 pm          Reply

      Great sentence Alex! I love the fact you’ve added extra information to the sentence.
      Can you add describing words now? What was the boat like?

  42. Charle m

    October 16, 2013 @ 4:50 pm          Reply

    One sunny day, Katie morag’s posh and facy grandma came to stay a day.

    Grandma mainland lived in the enormas, noisy and busy city so to travel to katie morag’s island she had to catch the giant ferry.

    Slowly she arrived on the black boat with all her bags and makeup!

    I cant wait to learn more about katie morag!!!
    :.}

    • Mrs. Armstrong

      October 17, 2013 @ 4:38 pm          Reply

      Wow! You’ve even used adverbs Charlie – well done!
      Can you add time connectives to link your sentences too?

  43. Archie

    October 16, 2013 @ 3:01 pm          Reply

    Katie Morag’s extremely posh Grandma came to stay. Her name was Grandma Mainland and she lived in the city. She brought all her posh things. They were very precious. She arrived on a private boat . It was golden and silvery white.

  44. Class 5

    October 16, 2013 @ 10:57 am          Reply

    Class five have had a practise at ‘uplevelling’ the first sentence and we are very pleased with it!

    One sunny day Katie Morag dashed to the harbour to collect her perfect grandma because she was coming to stay for a holiday.

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